💡 So nutzen: Erst selbst verbessern (mit den Tipps), dann hier vergleichen.
Links steht Levis Version, rechts die korrigierte – grün = geändert.
Aufgabe 7 – Thanksgiving
1. When do Americans celebrate Thanksgiving?
Levis Version
They celebrate it on the fourth thars-day of november.
Korrigiert
They celebrate it on the fourth Thursday in November.
Inhalt war richtig! Nur: Thursday richtig schreiben, November groß (Monate & Wochentage immer groß).
2. What do families traditionally eat?
Levis Version
They made Turkey and vegetables.
Korrigiert
They eat turkey and vegetables (and pumpkin pie for dessert).
Die Frage steht im Present (do … eat) → Antwort auch im Present: eat (nicht „made"). Und turkey = Truthahn (klein), Turkey = das Land.
3. Why do some people not celebrate Thanksgiving?
Levis Version
They celebrate it not, because after the colonization and killing of Native Americans. This happy celebration were by white settlers … wo wrong to ther.
Korrigiert
They don't celebrate it because, after the colonization and the killing of Native Americans, this happy celebration seems wrong to them.
Verneinung: don't celebrate (nicht „celebrate … not"). Aus den zwei Bruchstücken einen klaren Satz bauen. Fehlerwörter: wo→was/seems, ther→them.
Aufgabe 8 – Travel blog post
Wichtigster Punkt: alles durchgehend im Simple Past. Hier seine Sätze einzeln:
Levis Version
First I to see many big trees.
Korrigiert
First, I saw many big trees.
Levis Version
Next I made a run in the park. Then I see a wolf and take pictures of them.
Korrigiert
Next, I went for a run in the park. Then I saw a wolf and took pictures of it.
Levis Version
Finally we must leave the National Park, becouse it burn.
Korrigiert
Finally, we had to leave the national park because there was a wildfire.
Levis Version
All in all I can said that it makes fun. It was to bad that we must leaved.
Korrigiert
All in all, I can say that it was fun. It was too bad that we had to leave so soon.
So liest sich der ganze Text korrigiert:
Last weekend I was in Redwood National Park. First, I saw many big trees and the best part was how huge they were. Next, I went for a run in the park. Then I saw a wolf and took pictures of it. I also saw many other animals, for example a wild turkey. Finally, we had to leave the national park because there was a wildfire. All in all, I can say that it was fun. It was too bad that we had to leave so soon. Bye!
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- Simple Past durchhalten: see→saw, take→took, leave→left (nicht „leaved").
- must hat keine Vergangenheit → „mussten" = had to.
- Nach can kommt die Grundform: can say (nicht „can said").
- Deutsch-Fallen: „it makes fun" → it was fun; „made a run" → went for a run.
- to / too: „zu sehr" = too.
- Groß/klein: Thursday, November (Land Turkey vs. Vogel turkey).
- Schreibweise: because, them.
Wirklich starker erster Versuch – Struktur & Inhalt stimmen, jetzt nur noch die Verbformen schärfen! 💪